Crime Scene
Exposition: As the car sped up the mountain road, Kalin stopped for a breather after a long ride. She stepped out of Bently, her red Jeep. As she stood on the tip of the cliff, she felt like she was on top of the world. But after a little while, a chill ran down her spine.
Inciting incident & Rising action: The sight of the view was just fascinating. The breeze of the ocean ran through Kalin's hair like a soft, delicate brush combing through her thick dirty blonde hair. The wind brushed against her warm, caramel colored skin. Standing there with a jolly feeling, she absorbed the insightful landscape . With the last deep breath of the freshness, a mysterious smell ran up her nose, tickling her nose hair. Kalin pinched her nose over and over making sure she was okay and not have the feeling that she was just hallucinated. The mist of the ocean water threw a full force of the musty smell at her. Taking miniature steps, Kalin sniffed her way around the unsettled trees that were swaying furiously back and forth.
Climax: The smell grew stronger, as Kalin's heart pounded against her chest. Her heart dropped to her butt, as she came to the sight of a dead body below the cliff she was standing on. Kalin, motionless was unable to move a finger. She could feel her scalp becoming dry, her face was white as the shining, clear sky, and she had goosebumps all over her body. Kalin's eyes enlarged like an owl under the moonlight.
Falling Action: Kalin started panicking, while slowly trying to find her balance. She wobbled to Bently to grab her phone. As she dialed 911, her fingers felt as though they were going to break.
" 911, what's your emergency?"
" Please help me, I've discovered a dead body." Kalin spoke, grasping for air.
Resolution: Dodge's standard rear-wheel-drive police Charger pulled up behind Bently, Kalin stepped out of her car still sick from what she had seen. The CSI police did what they had to do, examined the body and then took the body away.
Denouement: Months later, Kalin received a phone call from one of the CSI police verifying the dead body had belonged to a college student of Davis named Albert. The story behind the dead body was said to be that, Albert had driven up the mountain with a couple of friends to kick it on the cliff. How Albert died? the police made a theological prediction stating that he was pushed off the cliff by one of his drunk friends.
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nice story! but maybe you should describe Kalin more in the exposition.
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